The majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars, famines, accidents and crime. Why do you think that is? Do you think the news should be a balance of both good and bad news?

Accidents, crime, wars, and famines are the most common topics for the majority of
news
even though they are awful. I believe
this
is because that industry is like a company that
needed
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needs
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revenues
however
I think that both kinds must be reported because good
news
brings happiness and relief to the viewers.
News
channels are like businesses so profits are
also
important to them. Bad
news
has more impact and evokes more emotions in viewers which were remembered easily. The more audience, the higher the revenue of the company and able to provide income to their employees.
For example
, in the
last
decades,
news
reporters often argued that whoever reports the big issues first will have higher revenues.
However
, those scenarios no longer
happened
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because of the developments on the internet since everyone can now create posts about anything. On the one hand, newspapers and
news
channels must report both bad and good
news
because people nowadays are looking for something that could make them smile and
relieve
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after working so long.
For example
, updates about athletes who won in their respective competitions and tournaments could spark pride and inspiration in the viewers.
This
kind of approach greatly benefited them since
this
could help them to continue their lives despite the
difficulty
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that they are facing. In conclusion, bad
news
catches more attention and so it produces higher income for the company rather than reporting only the negative. I think there must be both kinds of reports as a positive report inspires and gives happiness to the watchers.
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