The majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars, famines, accidents and crime. Why do you think that is? Do you think the news should be a balance of both good and bad news?
Accidents, crime, wars, and famines are the most common topics for the majority of
news
even though they are awful. I believe this
is because that industry is like a company that needed
revenues Wrong verb form
needs
however
I think that both kinds must be reported because good news
brings happiness and relief to the viewers.
News
channels are like businesses so profits are also
important to them. Bad news
has more impact and evokes more emotions in viewers which were remembered easily. The more audience, the higher the revenue of the company and able to provide income to their employees. For example
, in the last
decades, news
reporters often argued that whoever reports the big issues first will have higher revenues. However
, those scenarios no longer happened
because of the developments on the internet since everyone can now create posts about anything.
On the one hand, newspapers and Wrong verb form
happen
news
channels must report both bad and good news
because people nowadays are looking for something that could make them smile and relieve
after working so long. Wrong verb form
relieved
For example
, updates about athletes who won in their respective competitions and tournaments could spark pride and inspiration in the viewers. This
kind of approach greatly benefited them since this
could help them to continue their lives despite the difficulty
that they are facing.
In conclusion, bad Fix the agreement mistake
difficulties
news
catches more attention and so it produces higher income for the company rather than reporting only the negative. I think there must be both kinds of reports as a positive report inspires and gives happiness to the watchers.Submitted by angeline07 on
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overall
The essay has potential but needs improvement in addressing the prompt directly and providing clearer, more developed examples to support the points. Additionally, the logical structure and organization need refinement for improved coherence and cohesion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite