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The table details the international tourist arrivals in millions in 8 countries in 2009 and 2010 and the changes (in percentages).

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The table compares
number
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 of foreigns travelling to eight different countries in 2009
an
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and
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 2010 .
Overall
 its readily apparent all cities experienced
positive
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 trend except hong kong in
given
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a given
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 period. France is
most
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 visited ,
while
 hong kong received
less
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 customers than all. Countries like
france
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France
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,
us
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,
spain
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Spain
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 and Uk had more than half
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 visiting them
anually
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annually
manually
. Both
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us
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 and
spain
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Spain
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reported more
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1 %
change
 resulting in going from 66 to 67
million
 in 2010 and 55 to 56
million
 in a year.Though Uk had
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 number
people
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of people
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 visiting as Spain in 2010 ,it experienced
threefold
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a threefold
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change
 accounting for 57
million
 in 2010.
While
 top most country france
didnot
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did not
 experience any
change
 having over three forth of people
instersting
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interesting
 to visit. By far
germany
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Germany
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 experienced
highest
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the highest
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change
 followed by
china
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China
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 turkey and hong kong observed
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a negetive
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negetive
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negative
 trend.Visits
for
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to
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germany
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Germany
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 went from 11
million
 to 23
million
 .
Interstingly
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Interestingly
 Italy and
turkey
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Turkey
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 had
same
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a same
the same
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 number of
vistors
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visitors
at the end
 of
period
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 there is
huge
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 disparity in
level
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 of
change
 , with
former
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the former
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 having just over 2 %
change
while
 the latter had undergone around 33% .
Chinesese
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Chinese
 tourism went up by 10
million
 . Hongkong is
least
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the least
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 visited in both years,
although
 there was
11
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 % decline stood
it
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at 9
million
 by 2010
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