The table details the international tourist arrivals in millions in 8 countries in 2009 and 2010 and the changes (in percentages).

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The table compares
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of foreigns travelling to eight different countries in 2009
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2010 .
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its readily apparent all cities experienced
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trend except hong kong in
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period. France is
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visited ,
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hong kong received
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customers than all. Countries like
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,
spain
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and Uk had more than half
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million
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visiting them
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annually
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us
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and
spain
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Spain
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reported more
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1 %
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resulting in going from 66 to 67
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in 2010 and 55 to 56
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in a year.Though Uk had
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number
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visiting as Spain in 2010 ,it experienced
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change
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accounting for 57
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in 2010.
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top most country france
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did not
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having over three forth of people
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interesting
to visit. By far
germany
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Germany
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experienced
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change
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followed by
china
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China
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turkey and hong kong observed
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a negetive
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negetive
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germany
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Germany
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went from 11
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to 23
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.
Interstingly
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Interestingly
Italy and
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Turkey
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had
same
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number of
vistors
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visitors
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of
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there is
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disparity in
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of
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, with
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having just over 2 %
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while
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the latter had undergone around 33% .
Chinesese
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Chinese
tourism went up by 10
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. Hongkong is
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visited in both years,
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there was
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% decline stood
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at 9
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by 2010
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