The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the way in which rainwater is collected and treated and
then
used as drinking Linking Words
water
in a particular town in Australia.
At the onset, Use synonyms
it is clear that
there are seven stages in the process, beginning with collecting rainwater and culminating in using it as drinking Linking Words
water
.
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To begin
, rainwater falls onto houses’ roofs and gathered in special reservoirs placed on the roofs. Each house collects Linking Words
water
in Use synonyms
this
way. After that, the Linking Words
water
goes through vertical pipes installed on the side of the houses and drops into drains at the bottom. Use synonyms
Following
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this
, once enough liquid is collected, it runs to storage and Linking Words
then
is filtered by Linking Words
water
filters located under the ground from any solids.
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Next,
cleaned Linking Words
water
is put into storage and kept there for some time. In the subsequent stage, the Use synonyms
water
goes to reservoirs with added chemicals for Use synonyms
water
treatment to make it safe for drinking. Use synonyms
Finally
, ready Linking Words
water
is distributed between houses and could be used as drinking Use synonyms
water
.Use synonyms
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