The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the way in which rainwater is collected and treated and
then
used as drinking
water
in a particular town in Australia. At the onset,
it is clear that
there are seven stages in the process, beginning with collecting rainwater and culminating in using it as drinking
water
.
To begin
, rainwater falls onto houses’ roofs and gathered in special reservoirs placed on the roofs. Each house collects
water
in
this
way. After that, the
water
goes through vertical pipes installed on the side of the houses and drops into drains at the bottom.
Following
this
, once enough liquid is collected, it runs to storage and
then
is filtered by
water
filters located under the ground from any solids.
Next,
cleaned
water
is put into storage and kept there for some time. In the subsequent stage, the
water
goes to reservoirs with added chemicals for
water
treatment to make it safe for drinking.
Finally
, ready
water
is distributed between houses and could be used as drinking
water
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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