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Tourist Office The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

Tourist Office The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
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The given process table below illustrates demands for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom between two months, namely, January and June. At
the
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apply
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first glance,
it is clear that
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 information
request
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requests
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 in person and by telephone significantly jumped by June.
Hence
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, their result
almost
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were almost
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 identical to each other,
while
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 by letter or email suffered a decline in
number
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. In January, 400 people were informed by
tourist
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the tourist
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 office personally and
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number
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the number
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 rose gradually over the period and reached
until
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apply
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1800-1900.
In contrast
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, in the beginning, figures for people, who received information by letter and email were more than
previous
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a previous
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number
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 of people, yet unfortunately, went into free-fall halved over the period. Individuals, who ask for data by telephone saw
rise
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a rise
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 and fall between January and April,
nevertheless
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 in May index
number
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 moved upward from 1000
till
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to
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 1400, and remained
increase
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increased
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 until the end of the period.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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