Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no b longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt about the affective of advertising

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our lives, some

people

opine that

this

advertising has

successful

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to convince us to buy things,

while

others opine the contrary, they believe that we got used to it,

therefore

people

no longer pay attention to it. In

this

essay I would like to discuss both views and give my opinion and elaborate more on

this

and why I believe in

this

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with, advocates who say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things,

they

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believe that the

people

who set

this

advertising they very

curful

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careful

carful

to affect us by choosing the right time and place, a vivid example

for

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that (

food

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advertising ), they stream it in

lunch

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the lunch

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break, because at

this

time the person is looking for

somthing

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something

to eat , and when they see

for instance

a burger meal with a good price, they will directly choose

this

meal.

Therefore

, those who believe in the power of advertising, believe that it can affect us

unconcisly

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unconsciously

On the other hand

people

who agree with the idea that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it,

they

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believe that all advertising

are

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the same and they only want to attract

people

to buy their products,

furthermore

, they most

probablly

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probably

lie about the products,

therefore

it has no longer affect

people

. In my opinion, I believe that sometimes advertising can

tempting

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us by the way they display the products,

therefore

, it can be convincing,

on the other hand

, some of the advertising does not have a new idea and it

look

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like the others,

therefore

, it has no power on us.

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