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Some people feel that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is a better in the countrysides. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many
people
 argue that living in a city is a preferable lifestyle
while
 others think the countrysides are more comfortable for living.
This
 essay intends to analyze both views. I,
however
, agree with the first opinion. Those who prefer to live in the
countryside
 believe that in
this
 lifestyle they feel more independent.
This
 is because there are not any measures for living in the
countryside
. An example illustrating
this
 point is there is plenty of laws in
cities
, one of them is night control, meaning that
people
 who live in
cities
 can not go out after a fixed time because the police have established strict control,
however
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 there are not these kinds of measures in the
countryside
 so it can lead to an increase in the number of
people
 who want to live there . Alternatively,
although
 the living of
people
 has controlled by the government in
cities
, there are many facilities which can make it comfortable for living in
cities
 and these facilities can disappear the wish to living the
countryside
 of
people
. For ,example residents of the city have been provided with hot water, comfortable hospitals, specialized schools and modern kindergartens. If governments continue providing
people
 in
cities
 with these kinds of facilities, in the coming years the number of
people
 living in the
cities
 will probably increase from year to year. In summary,
while
 residents of the
countryside
 are freer, urban dwellers have an enviable lifestyle
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