The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table shows
comparison
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a comparison
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of
police
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the police
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budget between 2017 and 2018
while
pie
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the pie
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chart gives information about
usage
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the usage
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of money
fund
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funds
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in
same
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the same
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period of time. At
the
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first glance all sources of money, which they used, uplifted,
on the other hand
,
distribution
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the distribution
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of funding
is
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declined slightly. It is crystal clear to see that the national government is
biggest
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source of
annual
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the annual
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budget
of
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for
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both years which accounted
175,5
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for 175,5
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million
gbp
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GBP
in 2017, and
also
it increased
in
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3,3 million after one year. In the second place, local taxes' funding increased to 102,3 million which is
biggest
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improvement
all
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for all
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of them.
Lastly
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other sources increased
38
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to 38,5 which is
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a slightly
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slightly
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change.
About
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To
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pie
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the pie
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chart, there is a decrease
of
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in
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officers
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officers'
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salary
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which is 75
percent
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per cent
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to 69
percent
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per cent
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.
In contrast
,
technological
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the technological
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proportion almost doubled in 2018.
Furthermore
, we can
also
see that buildings and
transport's
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transport
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funding
was
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steady in
this
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these
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two years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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