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The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates
making
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the making
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smoked
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of smoked
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fish
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process
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 several main stages are involved in the
process
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 of making smoked
fish
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.
In particular
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, the
process
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 starts with fishing and ends up with selling smoked
fish
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. Looking at the diagram in more detail,
fish
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 are caught with
net
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a net
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.
Then
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, the
fish
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 are transported to
port
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the port
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 by boat after fishing. The
fish
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 are
freezed
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frozen
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 at the port.
After
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this
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, the
fish
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 are released to fresh water for thawing. The next
stage
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 is
cutting
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the cutting
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 and opening
process
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 of thawed
fish
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. It is followed by the
stage
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 of leaving the
fish
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 in the salty water for
certain
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a certain
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 time period which turns
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the fish
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fish
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fish's
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 colour
into
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apply
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yellow. It could
be explain
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be explained
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 by the illustration in more depth, at the next
stage
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 the
fish
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are
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is
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 smoked. After being smoked, the
fish
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 are ready
to
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for
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 packaging. The packages are left for freezing. The next
stage
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 is placing all the packages which are full
with
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of
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 smoked and
freezed
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frozen
fish
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 into cold stores. The cold stores transport to the
fish
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 shop and the smoked
fish
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 are ready for sale.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, process, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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