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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart provided illustrates the average monthly climate and the average number of hours of sunshine every year in three urban areas. New
York
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 City was the hottest in July, with average
temperatures
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 almost nearly 30
degrees
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, the lowest
temperatures
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 were in
January
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, lower than 5
degrees
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. The lowest average monthly
temperature
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 in
Sydney
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 was around 16
degrees
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 in July, on the opposite, the highest average
temperature
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 was 26
degrees
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 in
January
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. In London, the highest average monthly
temperatures
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 were in July and August about 24
degrees
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,
in contrast
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, there were 8
degrees
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 in
January
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. To compare the
temperatures
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 in these three cities, the highest monthly average
temperature
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 in July was in New
York
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, and the lowest was in
Sydney
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.
On the other hand
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, the highest average monthly
temperatures
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 during December and
January
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 was
Sydney
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,
on the contrary
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 was New
York
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.
However
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, three of these cities’
temperatures
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 had a cross in May,
therefore
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, the temperates were similar in
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 month.
Conversely
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, the most
temperature
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 difference was in
January
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.
Furthermore
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, the yearly average
temperature
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 was never lower than 15
degrees
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 in
Sydney
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, New
York
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 was the city which had the most
temperature
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 difference city. To compare total annual hours of sunshine, the number one was New
York
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, and the lowest was London. Even though the yearly average
temperatures
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 in
Sydney
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 were higher than in New
York
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,
nonetheless
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, the annual hours of sunshine were less than in New
York
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words york, temperatures, degrees, january, temperature, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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