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The bar chart below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage advancement of average
property
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prices
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 in Algeria, China and Argentina over a four-
year
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 period, commencing from 2007.
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, the growth in average
property
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prices
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 in China in
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percent
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 recorded an upward trend
while
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 that
one
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of
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Algeria and Argentina witnessed a
doward
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downward
 trend in the output of average
property
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prices
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. Beginning at 6.0
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percent
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 in 2007, the proportion of average
property
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prices
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 in Algeria decreased to 4.5
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percent
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 in 2008 followed by a drop of 1.5
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percent
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 between 2009 and 2010. As for
the
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Argentina’s average
property
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prices
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 growth in
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percent
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per cent
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, it experienced a steady rise from 3.0
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2007 to nearly 5.0
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2008
then
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dropping
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 dramatically to 1.2
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percent
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per cent
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 in the next
year
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 before
a
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 increase of 1.5
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percent
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per cent
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 in the final
year
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 of the period.
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, regard with China’s average
property
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prices
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 growth in
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percent
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,
starting
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started
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 at 2.0
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percent
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 in the first
year
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 of the period
then
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 steadily
increasing
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 to over 4.0
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percent
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per cent
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 in the next
year
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 before reaching its peak at approximately 6.2
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words property, prices, percent, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage growth
  • average property prices
  • economic conditions
  • real estate market
  • year-to-year growth rate
  • government policies
  • international events
  • growth trend
  • investment attractiveness
  • socioeconomic status
  • forecasting
  • infrastructure projects
  • real estate laws
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