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Study shows that many criminals have low levels of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?

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The practice has shown that the majority of offenders do not have an
education
.
Consequently
, some
people
 if prison starts to re-educate criminals, it can reduce the
crime
rate
. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 statement because there are cases when
people
 are forced to commit a
crime
 because they had not found a job, but there are still examples when well-educated
people
 have broken the law. One possible reason why
education
 can help to decrease the
crime
rate
 is that educated
people
 can find
job
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 to earn money. In fact, many gangsters grew up in unfavourable conditions, so they did not have any choice in how to build their future. After being educated in prison, offenders can guarantee they can earn money legally. Another reason why
education
 is more effective than punishment is that violence can increase the desire to commit a
crime
 after releasing back into the community. Having been educated,
people
 can improve their moral understanding and look at their behaviour from a new angle.
Such
people
 usually can reduce their time in prison and be released from jail as soon as possible.
Although
education
 is a working way to decrease the
crime
rate
, there are still well-educated criminals.
Such
 offenders usually commit money fraud or have corrupt deals. Unfortunately, these cases demand another approach because these types of
people
 cannot be re-educated. In conclusion,
while
people
 argue about whether
education
 in prisons helps decrease the
crime
rate
, In my opinion, not only can it help improve the prisoners' literate, but it can
also
 support them to find a job and try to adapt to society.
However
, there are
people
 who cannot stop doing violence even if they have knowledge or not.
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