Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many
people
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believe that
music
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is a wonderful way to
conect
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connect
everyone in every
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together, no
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distinguishing
about
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or ethnicity. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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comment.  One of the reasons
music
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excretes the barriers among different nations and
cultures
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is that
people
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enjoy
music
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from every part of the world.
Music
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does not need any knowledge to be enjoyed and understood if we just want to enjoy the melody. We appreciate the melody and depth of
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, that
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the reason why
people
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of all ages can together and enjoy the same
music
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, the more
music
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are
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produced and the more type of musical instruments can be used.
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can
reduces
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cultural differences and brings
people
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from different
cultures
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and ages to a common platform.
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, many
music
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genres, that we enjoy these days, were derived from multiple nations and
cultures
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and
people
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from all these
cultures
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enjoy and
love
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them. 
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,
music
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is an art which is enjoyed by all, and
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helps reduce the generation and age gaps among
people
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. To illustrate, when the national anthem is played, children, adults and elders all tune to the same emotion, and their relationship is stronger than ever.
Music
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can show various emotions like
love
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, sadness and so on. Many
love
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music
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can inspire the meaning of
love
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for someone who
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emotioness
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emotional
, sometimes can encourage the person who lost something important sometime in the past.  In conclusion,
music
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,
which
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can enrich our lives and strengthen the connections between
humans'
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relationship
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relationships
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, regardless of our culture and age.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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