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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts illustrate how a specific UK
school
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 changes its annual spending in three different
years
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, namely 1981, 1991, and 2001.
Overall
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, the
school
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 spent its
money
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 on four different categories
such
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 as teachers’
salaries
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, furniture and equipment, resources, and insurance. Most of the annual spending was
into
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on
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teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
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salaries
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,
however
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, insurance had the least amount in all three
years
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. In 1981, the proportion of teachers’
salaries
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 was about 40% which was the highest rank
between
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among
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 other categories. After a decade
this
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 number increased
one-tenth
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by one-tenth
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 and reached about 50%. But in 2001, it decreased slightly and reached 45%. Other workers’
salaries
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 were the sector that decreased every year
6
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from 6
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% to 7%. In 1981 it was about 28%, and
2001
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in 2001
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 15%. The next sector that the
school
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 spent its
money
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 on was furniture and equipment. And there was a fluctuation
on
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in
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 spending
money
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 on that because it started
with
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at
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 15%, after ten
years
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 decreased sharply by about 5%, and in 2001 reached about one-fourth. Resources
is
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are
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 the next category that the
school
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 spent
money
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 on and about 15% to 20% of
money
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 spent, but in 2001
this
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 number went under 10%.
However
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, insurance was the least sector that received the least
money
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 in all three
years
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 with under 10%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, years, money, salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual spending
  • Expenditure categories
  • Allocation
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Budget allocation strategy
  • Inflation-adjusted
  • Future implications
  • Educational institutions
  • Technological resources
  • Maintenance and operations
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fiscal management
  • Resource allocation
  • Strategic planning
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