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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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In recent years, health has attracted the general public's attention. There are some
people
 who believe that a healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet,
do
Correct subject-verb agreement
does
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exercise
 and avoids stress.
This
 essay will give some information to support
this
 issue.
Firstly
, there are many
people
 who have a good diet,
for example
, they always have a full breakfast and lunch, they would not have dinner or just eat a little bit, and they have not eaten anything after 8 pm;
Moreover
, lots of
people
 just eat vegetables, they have not eaten meat or fish in the meal.
Therefore
, their weight is not raised and no fat inside their body, which can reduce of sick for
people
.
Secondly
, all
people
 always spend time do
exercise
 every day, some
people
exercise
 in the morning or evening after dinner.There are many ways to do
exercise
,
for example
, they can play soccer, play volleyball, swim, run, do yoga, walk..., they are making sure that their body must action for helping their life are feeling relaxed, stronger, not bored;
Finally
,
although
 our life have a lot of things that make us always worry,
people
 still take care of our health. When we can avoid stress, it means always
smile
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, getting everything happy,
not
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and not
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 being sad or angry,.... we will spend time
to
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apply
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relaxing at the weekend, we will listen to music or
read
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reading
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 some books after work, lieu of we think lots about some stories sad in daily life. In conclusion, from what I talk above, there are many different ways to help
people
 be healthy, so
people
 should have
further
 consideration for
this
 issue.
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