Internet crime is increasing rapidly as more and more people are using the Internet to make financial transactions. What can be done to tackle this problem?

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crime
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is a paramount
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nowadays, the number of
Internet
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users and services provided over it is increasing rapidly so does the number of attacks and crimes. I believe that over the years each one of us will face
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problem
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one way or another. So what can be done to prevent
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from
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happening
? In my
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the question should be regulated governmentally
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certain security
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should be taken individually. First of all, I think, the
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should be recognized and dealt with on a national level. The country should have some kind of cyber police to work on
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cybercrime
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crime
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complaints
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the necessary laws and regulations. The thieves and criminals should be brought to justice and punished in accordance
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the
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committed. The punishment could start
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considerable fines and be followed by time in prison if the
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commited
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had severe consequences. To my mind
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can have a huge impact on the number of
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crimes,
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it
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requires a fair system which might be quite problematic if to talk about Ukraine, its policy and
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. And
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the
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is not completely regulated governmentally, let's not forget about the security measures each
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user can take in order to avoid becoming a victim of
cyber
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crime
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. It's vital to be attentive and
coutious
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courteous
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all the time. Do not provide credit card details or other personal data over the phone, do not use suspicious websites and resources for shopping, do not download malicious stuff and it will positively impact your user experience and safety.
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one can use special software and services to protect oneself like
vpn
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VPN
, identity protection software,
adblock
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and so on. To
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I should say that it is complicated to eliminate
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Internet
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crime
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completely, it might take a lot of
efforts
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and resources,
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if to watch out and follow the simple steps to protect yourself, it is possible to prevent
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cases in the future.
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