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Cooking food is a waste of time in today’s hectic life. Fast food restaurants are helpful in modern living and it is less stressful. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #waste #time #today’s #life #restaurants
Today's world is more competitive and faster than past . Cooking
food
 lass of time in promaya ye hectic life. Junk
food
 restaurants are useful in the life hood is more stressful . I personally believe that people should not follow
this
 friend. I disagree with
this
 statement following in paragraph.
However
 , I shall Show some reasons why, l disagree about
this
 phenomenon. There are many reasons, for
this
 view.
To begin
 with, diseases for eating fast
food
 abo Street
food
.
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cost
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money
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money
, which is important on these factors,
such
 as, it is irrefutable that fast
food
 is expensive thing compare to other
food
.
as a result
, They can shortage money for living standard.
However
, the potential point is that variety can highly contagious diseases.
For example
: when they eat outside
food
 regularly in
this
 cases, they can endure diabetes, obesity, heartacctack . and many more.
Moreover
, they may find unsafely cooking systems.
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