The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visited different museums in London.
The chart illustrates the number of
people
from history museums
, British museums
, national museums
and science museums
who visited different museums
in London.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of
the percentage of Change preposition
apply
people
of different age
groups
who went to the cinema once a month or more in one European country from 2000 to 2011.
Overall
, the majority of people
in the 15-24 years old age
group have reached a speaking percentage climb compared to other age
groups
. while
age
groups
from 35 and over had hit the lowest point. Talking about the age
group 15-24, from 2006 to 2009, the number of people
who went to the cinema once a month fluctuated, reaching a peak in 2010. age
groups
7-14 and 25-35 go up. 7-14 and
25-35 years old from 2007 to 2011 year, 7-14 Correct word choice
apply
year
old tended to increase, Fix the agreement mistake
years
while
from 25 - 35 years old, from 2007 to 2011 it decreased by 10% and then
increased again to the original state of 30%. from 35 and over is the lowest compared to the other groups
and increases steadily, the highest in 2011 is 12%.Submitted by joyce.ta213 on
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