In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, business tends to highlight new variants of their
product
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. In my opinion, it occurs because they want to increase
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sales
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, but I believe that
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causes negative sides. The main reason why companies broadcast interesting
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advertisement
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and claim that their products are new is that they want
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public attention quickly
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the high earning. When
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is presented uniquely by highlighting
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new variant, people tend to be curious and try to buy the
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, food. Once
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product
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has been introduced,
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buy other
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under that brand.
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to increase
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sales
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. The negative sides
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implementing
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way are explained as follows.
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it may lessen the
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if the business does not prioritize
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quality. Nowadays, there are a ton of online reviews. Before people buy a
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, they can check whether the food is recommended or not. If their
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is not good enough, they probably get one star and directly slow the
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.
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product
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is sometimes failed to maintain the
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because the customers just want to know the viral one. After they meet that the taste is not amazing as the
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, they can easily forget it.
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precious cultural food. One of
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traditional
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in Gresik, Indonesia is Leker.
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snack after the Crepes stalls flourish in malls. In conclusion,
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the advertisement
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can be seen as
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a marketing
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strategy to promote a
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;
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, it
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addressed some problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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