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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1984 and 2004.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1984 and 2004.
#information #price #bananas #four #countries
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conveys
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 information on four various countries'
price
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prices
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 of bananas in US dollars between 1994 and 2004.
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,
it is clear that
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 Japan's fruits appear to be more expensive,
while
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 the USA stayed economical when it came to prices.
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, as can be seen in the diagram,
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 1994, Japan's cost of bananas had been 2.00$.
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, after a year, the figure escalated to approximately 3.00$.
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, it could be noticed that the formerly mentioned countries' rate was unstable.
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, a major change
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 in 2001 when banana pricings dropped to a mere 1.50$.
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, the most steady figure is considered to be the United States of America. The price of bananas
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 to be almost 1.00$ throughout the years of 1999 to 2004.
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, Germany experienced an abundance of alterations,
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 the end, it becomes 1.25$ permanently. Regarding France, there are no absolute differences to be noted, except the whopping decrease in 2003.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • price fluctuation
  • steady increase/decrease
  • significant rise/drop
  • trend
  • noticeable
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • highest
  • lowest
  • throughout the period
  • stable
  • volatile
  • potential reasons
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