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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates electricity production
units
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 of electricity production by
fuel
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, namely coal,
oil
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, natural
gas
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, hydropower, and nuclear power in
Australia
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 and
France
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 in 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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,
Australia
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 and
France
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 experienced an increase in electricity
units
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. In
Australia
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, the famous
fuel
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 was Coal, meanwhile, in
France
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, the popular source was nuclear.
To begin
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 with, in 1980,
Australia
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 used four sources (coal,
oil
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, natural
gas
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, and hydropower). The total production was 100
units
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, which number rose to 130 in 2000. In the same year, the coal was 50 entities, and twenty
years
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 later the number dramatically increased to 130. The
oil
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 experienced decreased to 2 in 2000.
However
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, natural
gas
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 extremely fell from 20 to 2
units
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.
Finally
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, Hydropower rose to 36 in 2000.
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, in
France
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, there are five sources of
fuel
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, the total
units
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 in 1980 were 90 and
then
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 increased to 180
units
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 in 2000. The coal remained stable for two different
years
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.
Next,
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Oil
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 increased to 25; meanwhile, natural
gas
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 dramatically fell from 25 to 2
units
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. Same as
oil
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, natural
gas
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 fell to 2 in 20
years
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.
Moreover
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, nuclear
fuel
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 became very popular; the number rose in 20
years
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, from 15
units
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 to 126 in 2000, which hit the peak.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, fuel, oil, gas, australia, france, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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