The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different years

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The given two pie charts illustrate six categories of

devices

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which are used by Canadian people to watch television between the 18 and 25 age group from 2009 to 2019.Units are measured in percentage. It is noticeable that the proportion of used conventional

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and laptop experienced a considerable fall after 10 years ,

while

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this

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figure for mobile phones and tablets witnessed an upward trend from 2009 to 2019.

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information in the first

year

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,year

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34%and 20% of the average

devices

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of Canadian users rate went on conventional

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and laptop .

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, by 2019, the percentage of

devices

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(conventional

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and laptop) had fallen 4%and 12% respectively.

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,in terms of flat-screen

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,the proportion of using

this

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category accounted for 8% in 2009,after 10 years,

this

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figure saw a sharp increase to 27 per cent.The smallest proportion of using

devices

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belonged to tablets in the first year.,

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in 2019,there was a 14 per cent rise from 5%to 19% ,in

this

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category equalled that of a tablet

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Vocabulary: Replace the words devices, tv with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

168 words

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The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different years

Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientist think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Despite a large number of gyms, a sedentary lifestyle is gaining popularity in the contemporary world. What problems are associated with this? What solutions can you suggest?

You have recently moved to a different city. You did not have a chance to tell your friend about the move, Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Explain why you decided to move Compare your new home with your previous home Tell him/her about the area you are now living in