IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The chart below gives information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
#information #ages #population #yemen #projections #features #comparison
The
below given
Add a hyphen
below-given
show examples
 graphs indicate the percentage of
population
Add an article
the population
show examples
 that was present in the
year
 2000 in two different countries. The data is divided
in
Change the preposition
into
show examples
 three
age
 groups and the graphs
also
 show the estimated variations in the
amount
Change the quantifier
number
show examples
 of people in the
year
 2050. As we look at the charts
initially
, it is noticeable that the folks belonging to teenage and middle adulthood groups dominate the size in both
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
areas. Looking at Yemen, in the
year
 2000, the
age
 group of 0-14 years covered half of the country, followed by the
age
 group of 15-59 years.
However
, it has been predicted that in the
year
 2050, the number of adolescents and adults would increase
upto
Correct your spelling
up to
 57.3% and will be tracked by infants and kids. The old
age
 circle will rise
upto
Correct your spelling
up to
 5.7% in 2050. Studying the pie-charts of Italy, we can say that the statistics are a bit
smiliar
Correct your spelling
similar
 to that of Yemen, as in 2000, the majority of the land is covered by teens and adults.
Nevertheless
,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
toddlers covered only 14.3% of the area. The variations in size assumed in the
year
 2050 are, an improvement in the numbers of old folks by 18.2%,
while
 there will be a decrease in infants, young teens and adults.
Submitted by rutvipatel199 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words year, age with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: