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The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The purpose of
this
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 report is to provide data pertaining to changes which took place in
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the nature
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nature
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Nature
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Museum
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 between 2010 and 2013.
Overall
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, the pictures
has
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 became/become much more developed, with the construction of more facilities for entertainment purposes.
To begin
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 with,
both
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in both
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 the
year
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years
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 2010 and 2013, the
Museum
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 still remain
some
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in some
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 positions.
Firstly
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. from the entrance, there was a lobby and
also
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 the ticket desk in the same area. Next to it, there was a place for the Dinosaurs.
At
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 the lobby, the
Museum
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 has
the
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a
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 door which leads to
the
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Ocean Hall. In 2010, the Mammals which was adjoining the Dinosaurs
was
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were
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 knocked down and replaced by the Ice Age in 2013. Another striking change is the garden in the
easthern
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eastern
 of the area, which was planted in 2010. After that, the
Museum
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 decided to
built
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build
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to
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apply
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some entertainment facilities in the year 2013, which includes
the
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a
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 shop, cafe and Human
Ongins
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Origins
 Display. The
last
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 change is that the place of Mamals,
it
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was erected in the same area
of
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as
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 the entertainment facilities.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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