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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts present the proportion of people who
was
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 arrested between 1989 and 1994,
while
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 the bar chart illustrates the reasons for arrest recently.
Overview
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, it can be seen that the number of
males
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 who were arrested is higher than
females
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 and the highest reason is public drinking.
According to
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 the pie charts, the percentage of persons arrested in
males
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 is higher than
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females
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in females
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 almost 4 times, with the figure being 32% and 9%, respectively. Moving on to the bar chart, it’s clear that the highest amount of arrested
reason
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reasons
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 was occupied by public drinking with well over 30% in
males
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 and around 38% in
females
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,
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 the ratio of
drink
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 driving in
females
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 is lower than
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males
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in males
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, accounting for just under 15%.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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