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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people say that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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It is often assumed that advertising is the way for anyone who has a product and would let the public
to
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see it and perhaps purchase it .
While
 some people believe that advertising is the best way to convince the crowd ,
Other
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Others
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 think that with
many
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much
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 advertising nowadays people no longer care much
to
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 it . In
this
 essay, I will examine both ideas and tell you
in
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 my point of view why we
are
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no longer pay attention to
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Firstly
 so many companies provide and
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such
 a
sections
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call
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called
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markting
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marketing
 which is
response
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for
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promotion
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the promotion
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 of sales and it is really essential , the main goal of advertising is to show whatever the company would like to sell to the public and explain why we should get it .
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, one company increase their sales because only
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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