The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the information about gender joining various courses in the evening at an adult education centre in 2009 and the pie chart presents the proportion of ages of the attendants.
Overall
, it can be seen that most activities
were join
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by females more than males and most of them were 50
years
old or above.
According to
the bar chart, it’s clear that women
interested
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in language 40
persons
, followed by painting, drama, and sculpture, with the figures being 30, 20 and 5
persons
.
On the contrary
,
painting
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the painting
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was the highest number interested by men with 25
persons
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people
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, come after by language
20
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persons
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people
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. Interestingly, the figure of drama and sculpture are similar with 10
persons
of
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in
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each course. Apparently, the highest number of attendant ages was occupied by
elder
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an elder
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with 50
years
old or over,
while
the youngest people
with
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apply
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20
years
old
was
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were
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the least attended.
In addition
, the middle ages in both 30-39 and 40-49
years
old participated
16
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at 16
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% and 26% respectively.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, persons with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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