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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart serves data about the
number
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 of
people
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 who go to some public areas in Canada based on where they come from. The chart clearly shows that
Cinema
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 is the
most
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go-to place visited by some
people
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,
besides
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, Theatre is the least
the
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number
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 of visitors. Even though most
people
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 love going to the
Cinema
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, the New Migrants
that
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born in other countries mostly
are
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tend to go to the Library, it is clear from the charts that show approximately 55% of them choose to go to the library (the highest percentage). The
number
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 is followed by the
Cinema
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 which
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is 5
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% lower.
On the other hand
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, the new Migrants born in English-speaking countries are following the trend of the local
people
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 who love to go to the
cinema
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, they are in second place in
a
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the
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number
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 of
cinema
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 visitors (65%),
moreover
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, they are
also
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goingalso
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going also
 went to the Zoo as their 2nd favourite place (50%) Meanwhile, only 43% of the Zoo's visitors are locals, which is lower than the
number
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 of new migrants born in English-speaking countries.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, cinema with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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