The table below shows how many students of a school in the UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how many students of a school in the UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following table depicts the number of pupils who studied in the UK and participated in four different types of sports in 10 years period from 2001 to 2011. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that football was the biggest figure in all years.
Although
basketball was the next popular trend among the
students
, it fell steeply and became the least number of
students
who chose
this
sport,
while
both swimming and running displayed broadly similar trends. In 2001, football, which was the highest
numbers
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number
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of
students
, started the graph precisely at 60 participants and fluctuated until 2007 between
from
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apply
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70 to 60 before
steadily
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recovery and
finished
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finishing
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the data at around 69
students
. As for basketball, it
begand
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began
the statistic, which remained unchanged from 2008 to 2011, at over 52 pupils
then
steadily increased to 60 before plummeting to 20
students
.
On the other hand
, both running and swimming started the figure at around 20
students
and
then
swimming peaked at 60 participants in 2006 before
huge
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dropped and finished the data at over 28. Even though running was the smallest
numbers
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number
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students
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of students
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who chose
this
sports
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sport
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, it increased dramatically to 60 participants by 2007, and it became the second
popular
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most popular
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trend in the UK school.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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