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Band 6.5

The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library's manager, in your letter include: -A brief introduction of yourself -Your experience and relevant skills. -Why you want the job

#school #library #applicants #job #summer #manager #-a #introduction #-your #skills #-why
Dear Sir or Madam My name is Ruxshona.I am in the 9th grade ,I am fifteen years old I am studying English at a Bukhara school.I am interested in
this
 subject and in the future, I want to become a translator or an English teacher.I saw the news of working in
this
library
 on TV when it was announced and I am writing about your place of
work
. I am
also
 interested in different books and I have worked in a
library
 before and I fancied it very much so I want to
work
 again and I have experience in
this
 field .I know the names of books because I have read a lot . For these reasons,I would like to
work
 in the
library
this
 summer.I know that if I
work
 in the
library
,I will know more books and I will definitely read them, and my experience will increase I said, it will be good from the fashion side, because it will cover my expenses . That's why I want to
work
 in a
library
 . Yours sincerely, Ruxshona
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph revolves around a single idea. The second paragraph is a bit disjointed, mixing experience with personal interest.
Coherence & Cohesion
Logical structure needs to be more evident. The flow from personal introduction to experience, then to reasons for interest should be clear and sequenced.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your greeting and closing are too informal given the context. It's better to use full names if known or a more formal tone if not.
Task Achievement
Expand on your experiences with specific examples and how they relate to the skills required for the job at the library.
Task Achievement
Include a polite request for consideration of your application to enhance the writing tone appropriately for a job application.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • assistant librarian
  • library management system
  • cataloging
  • inventory management
  • customer service
  • literature enthusiast
  • community outreach
  • information technology skills
  • team player
  • flexible hours
  • book shelving
  • multitasking
  • interpersonal skills
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