Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development?
There are some
countries
which are achieves
international sports by building specialised Change the verb form
achieve
facilities
to training
top Wrong verb form
train
athetes
Correct your spelling
athletes
instead
of ensure
Change the verb form
ensuring
sport
Change the noun form
sports
facilities
that everyone can use.I think that this
method completely is wrong for devoloping
Correct your spelling
developing
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
,
because Remove the comma
apply
sport
mean Change the noun form
sports
is
health and Unnecessary verb
apply
healthyness
is Correct your spelling
healthiness
essencial
for everybody.
Correct your spelling
essential
Countries
believe that train
top athletes will be better for Wrong verb form
training
develop
of Change the form of the verb
developing
people
,however
they do not think thatAdd a comma
,however
,
each person may not Remove the comma
apply
athlet
.That's why Correct your spelling
athletic
to
my mind,the governments have to build new Change preposition
in
sport
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sports
centers
and provide them Change the spelling
centres
Change preposition
with sport
sport
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sports
facilities
that everyone can use or there is another way that they can sell some sport
Change the noun form
sports
equipments
Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
with
Change preposition
at
cheap
cost.Correct article usage
a cheap
Due to nowadays
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Nowadays
generally
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,generally
people
may not go to gym
but they want Add an article
the gym
exercise
and most Add the particle
to exercise
of
Change preposition
apply
Add an article
the sport
sport
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sports
facilities
are expensive in sportshops
.I think that It would be betterCorrect your spelling
sports shops
that
,Correct determiner usage
apply
Correct word choice
if these
these equipment
will be cheap.
At the same Change the determiner
this equipment
time
the governments Add a comma
,time
also
have to encourage to
each person Change preposition
apply
for
Change preposition
to
go
to Change the verb form
going
sport
Change the noun form
sports
centers
or Change the spelling
centres
may be
they can Correct your spelling
maybe
built
new Change the verb form
build
be built
area
in Fix the agreement mistake
areas
work places
for exercise.Humans can allocate their work time for their health and Correct your spelling
workplaces
this
time should not affect salaries
of Correct article usage
the salaries
people
.Surrely countries
have to change some rules in the labor
code,Change the spelling
labour
however
in my point of Add a comma
,however
view
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,view
this
will be effective for increase
healthy Change the verb form
increasing
people
in public.For instance
:the government can create the rule that,people
can visit the gym which will locate in work places
for thirty Correct your spelling
workplaces
minute
and Fix the agreement mistake
minutes
people
have to pay 1 persentage
of their salaries for visiting Correct your spelling
percentage
this
area.
In conclude
I think that exercising is important for health and if Replace the word
conclusion
countries
Change the verb form
want
wants
belong to healthy Add the particle
towants
poeple
,they should provide Correct your spelling
people
sport
Change the noun form
sports
facilities
that everyone can use.Submitted by Ayan on
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