The office building where you work doesn't have any parking spaces available for employees. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter -explain the problem - suggest a solution - say how on-site or nearby parking would benefit employees.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

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letter to inform you that there is no available parking

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for the employees in the vicinity of the workplace building. For the past four months, everyone in the office

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dissatisfied with the parking arrangement and lack of other areas to park nearby. A 25-minute walk away parking

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is not acceptable by the working staff because it is time-consuming and redundant.

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, employees with arthritis and back pain suffer greatly

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this

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. Perhaps we could consider renting 'Gold Arena's' parking

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for a few months as it is only 5 minutes away from the office building;

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, it will significantly reduce the distance that employees have to cover each day after parking their vehicles.

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, as discussed in the

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floor meeting, we can use the profits from

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year's sales to build the company's own parking

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underground which will be used by over 150 members of the workforce. Thank you for taking my complaint into consideration.

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details can be discussed in person at your availability. Yours sincerely, Akshita Parasher

Submitted by parasherakshita123 on Tue Jun 13 2023

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coherence and cohesion

Address the manager by name (if known) instead of using "Sir/Madam" for a more personalized approach.

task response

Fully address all the points in the task prompt, including the benefits of on-site or nearby parking for employees.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

181 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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