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The graph below shows that the persentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows that the persentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012
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The report illustrates percentages of export business of Australia to 4 different countries from 1990 to 2012. Generally speaking, China's highest projection is in 2012,
while
 its lowest is
in
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 1990 to 1995.
While
 for
Japan
they
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started with a good reputation in the early
90's
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 but have a bit dive starting
from
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in
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 1995.
On the other hand
,
United
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the United
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states
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States
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 gone through a
lot
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 ups and downs over the years
while
India
starting
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started
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 with the lowest percentage at the beginning of 1990 and
still
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is still
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 in the lowest position in 2012. From 1990 to 2000, China had an increment
by
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of
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 5% rather than
India
 only remained at 0% level.
On the other hand
,
Japan
 and
United
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the United
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states
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States
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 start off with
reputable
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a reputable
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 percentage
by
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of
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 25% and 11% but
Japan
's
stocks
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stock
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 market
begin
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begins
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 to drop gradually and
for
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apply
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the United
states
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States
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 the stocks
shows
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show
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 a little bit of increment by 2%. From 2000 to 2012, China's stock market
skyrocketing
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skyrocketed
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 starting from the year of 2000 until 2010 and
have
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further
 increment to 27% by 2012.
Conversely
,
India
's stock begin to
mushroomed
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mushroom
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 until 2010 and slightly dropped by the year of 2012 and
for
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Japan
's
their
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apply
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stock market begin to fall gradually to 18%
and
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apply
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similar cases for the United
States
 faced
sudden
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a sudden
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 drop until 2010 and rises about 2% defeated
India
 by 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, states, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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