The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.

The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.
The line chart illustrates the
price
changes of Outokumpu's
share
over
period
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a period
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of 4 years. A glance at the figure provided reveals that there were fluctuations in its
share
price
from January 2006 to December 2010.
To begin
, the started
price
of Outokumpu's
share
experienced at around 12
euros
, rising steadily exclude there were oscillations
along
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2006. It began to increase dramatically
in
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the end of 2006 and reached a peak at above 30
euros
but
then
it dropped significantly throughout 2007
although
they
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fluctuated over a
period
.
Furthermore
, the
share
price
soared tremendously in 2008, starting to decline again until reached its low
at
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almost 7
euros
in
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the beginning of 2009.
Nevertheless
, the
price
of Outokumpu tried to rise again until 2010 even though there is fluctuation during the
period
and it fell
down
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to approximately over 10
euros
in the final
period
.
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