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The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.

The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.
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The line chart illustrates the
price
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 changes of Outokumpu's
share
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 over
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period
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a period
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 of 4 years. A glance at the figure provided reveals that there were fluctuations in its
share
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price
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 from January 2006 to December 2010.
To begin
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, the started
price
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 of Outokumpu's
share
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 experienced at around 12
euros
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, rising steadily exclude there were oscillations
along
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in
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 2006. It began to increase dramatically
in
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at
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 the end of 2006 and reached a peak at above 30
euros
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 but
then
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 it dropped significantly throughout 2007
although
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they
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it
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 fluctuated over a
period
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.
Furthermore
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, the
share
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price
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 soared tremendously in 2008, starting to decline again until reached its low
at
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of
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 almost 7
euros
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in
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at
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 the beginning of 2009.
Nevertheless
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, the
price
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 of Outokumpu tried to rise again until 2010 even though there is fluctuation during the
period
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 and it fell
down
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apply
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to approximately over 10
euros
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 in the final
period
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, share, period, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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