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The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.

The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.
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The line chart illustrates the
price
 changes of Outokumpu's
share
 over
period
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a period
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 of 4 years. A glance at the figure provided reveals that there were fluctuations in its
share
price
 from January 2006 to December 2010.
To begin
, the started
price
 of Outokumpu's
share
 experienced at around 12
euros
, rising steadily exclude there were oscillations
along
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 2006. It began to increase dramatically
in
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at
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 the end of 2006 and reached a peak at above 30
euros
 but
then
 it dropped significantly throughout 2007
although
they
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it
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 fluctuated over a
period
.
Furthermore
, the
share
price
 soared tremendously in 2008, starting to decline again until reached its low
at
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of
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 almost 7
euros
in
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at
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 the beginning of 2009.
Nevertheless
, the
price
 of Outokumpu tried to rise again until 2010 even though there is fluctuation during the
period
 and it fell
down
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to approximately over 10
euros
 in the final
period
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, share, period, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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