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Nowadays, people all over the world are spending more and more time apart from their families. Why is this happening? How does this affect people and their fomilioc)

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better
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 future and lifestyle, mass migration can be seen these days. Moving to another country overweigh other aspects,
although
 a crucial part of
relation
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 of their
life
 is being challenged. In
this
 decade,
due to
advancement
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 of technology, people have broadened
vision
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their vision
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. A
person
 who chooses to achieve their goals, shifting to
metropolis
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 for higher education in
renowned
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 university.
In
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result
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, which
develop
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 better job opportunities and
future
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a future
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 in business. If a
person
 might invest
its
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years in
hard-work
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,
most
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 probable
chances
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he
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 would gain a lifestyle, like; modern facilities and infrastructure. Somehow, people may have more inclination toward
future
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the future
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 rather than spending quality time with family. At
blooming
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a blooming
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 stage, a
person
 is achieving all the basic needs,
however
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 an integral part of their
life
 can be
deal
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 with
kind
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a kind
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 of stress or regret. To elaborate, during special occasions and moments, a regret of not being part of a family might not be complete a
person
. A sense of stress can be seen
,
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 because no one will be there to understand or appreciate.
Therefore
, a generational gap
taking
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 place in families , where both sides would
deprived
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from
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 learning from each other.
To sum up
, for living a better
life
, there is
not
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no
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 other feasible option for potential
life
 seekers
instead
.
Moreover
, a thin layer of deprivation from moral values and
emotion
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emotions
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 in-between challenging families.
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