The bar charts show the percentages of film release and ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 (romance, drama, comedy, fantasy).

The bar charts show the percentages of film release and ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 (romance, drama, comedy, fantasy).
The bar charts illustrate the
porportion
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proportion
of
release
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the release
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of
films
and the
corespondingsales
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corresponding sales
of tickets
according to
4 genres of
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apply
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movies (
drama
,
comedy
, fantasy
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and
romance
) between 1996 and 2006.
Overall
, it can be seen that
drama
saw the highest percentage of the
films
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that debuted
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while
comedy
contributed the highest proportion of ticket
sales
. Apart
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from
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that, all types of genres experienced
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an increased
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in
percentage
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the percentage
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of
releaseand
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release and
released
sales
of tickets except
romance
. In
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terms of
films
relased
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released
, as high as 25%
drama
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of drama
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was released in 1996, but the figure was only 20% for
comedy
. 4 years later, the value increased by 9% for the former and 5% for the latter.
Similarly
, fantasy saw
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gradual increment over the period (about 4%).
Romance
,
however
, remained static in the percentage of
films
produced, at slightly over 5%. In terms of ticket
sales
,
comedy
persistently topped the chart, with 20% from the
begining
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beginning
and increased
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further to
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23% after 4 years.
Similarly
,
drama
witnessed
slight
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increment of about 1%throughout the period. Ticket
sales
of
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fantasy and
romance
were not high, with only 3 and 5% in 1996 respectively, but the figure for
romance
plummeted after 4 years to hit a low of 2%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly".
Vocabulary: Replace the words films, drama, comedy, romance, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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