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Some people belive that the fast pace and stress of modren life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you aree or disagree?

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I agree with
this
given
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statement, which says that
life
 is more stressful and busier. As a ,result it is opined by some masses
that is
 having some negative effect on families. The main reason, why I believe
modern
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the modern
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 lifestyle effect negatively on each family is that nowadays, more people are spending less
time
 on the family
due to
 busy plans. The more society develops, the harder everyone has to work for better living conditions. In today's
world
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 both parents are often working long hours, which leaves less
time
 for them to spend together as a family.
This
 can lead to feelings of isolation and loneliness and it can make it difficult to build strong relationships. The fast pace of modern
life
 can be very stressful and
this
 stress can take a toll on family relationships. More stress can create a tense and unhealthy environment in the home. When families are busy and stressed , they may not have as much
time
 to communicate with each other.
On the other hand
, the origin of many stressful situations in the family
also
 depends on the development of technology
that is
, the Internet. Parents spend more
time
 on the phone or the Internet than communicating with their children. Even if it is just for a few minutes each day, make sure to schedule some
time
 to spend together as a family.
This
 could involve eating dinner together going for walks or playing different games.
As a consequence
, the family and households will be strong.
For instance
, if a mother communicates for a few minutes each day with her child . It strengthens the child's self-confidence and makes him feel at ease. In conclusion, I reiterate my vehement belief that the rapid pace and stressful nature of present
life
 are having
a
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detrimental consequences on family relationships.
Furthermore
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 modern
life
 demands many things,
people
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and people
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 should not forget that love and affection for family are beyond everything.
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