Some people like to work in company which offer high salaries, other prefer working in a company which offer good working atmosphere. What do you think. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

some people
wants
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to
works
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in
company
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which is interested to pay high wage
whereas
others interested to work in a
company
where
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it
provide
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good
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working atmosphere. I believe
company
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the company
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should have
offer
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both. The
eassy
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essay
easy
below describes why both
high
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salary and atmosphere
are require
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to
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any
company
. With regards to a
company
which is
offereing
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offering
high salaries.
Definetly
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Definitely
, a high wage can give motivation and satisfaction to the
employess
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employees
.
This
helps to employees work for a
company
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • advancement
  • sacrifice
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • employee well-being
  • team collaboration
  • innovation
  • retain
  • long-term career success
  • skilled workers
  • professional growth
  • work-life harmony
  • positive atmosphere
  • supportive culture
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