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There are two-line chart diagrams depict changes that the percent of electrical appliance in households in 1920-2019 and the total time of doing housework every weeks in same time.

There are two-line chart diagrams depict changes that the percent of electrical appliance in households in 1920-2019 and the total time of doing housework every weeks in same time.
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There are two-line chart diagrams depicting changes that the
percentage
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 of electrical appliances in households in 1920-2019 and the total
time
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 of doing
housework
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 every week at the same
time
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. For the first line chart diagram,
it is clear that
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 the figures are about three kinds of electrical equipment. For the
percentage
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 of washing machines, it could be noticed that there existed a slightly increased from 1920 to 1960.
Furthermore
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, it increased by 30%. From 1960 to the next 50 years, it kept steady. The
percentage
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 of households with refrigerators and vacuum cleaners, as an
overall
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trend
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, climbed from 1920 to 2019. It should be noticed that the
percentage
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 of refrigerators had a more dramatic change than the vacuum cleaners. It clearly shows that the rate of using refrigerators had rapidly increased, and nearly 100 per cent went up. The second line chart diagram represents the
time
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people
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 do
housework
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 every week. It shows a quickly decreased
trend
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. In 1950,
people
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 did
housework
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 at least to spend 50 hours, and yet
people
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 only spent ten hours on
housework
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 in 2019. It was a dramatic change. In conclusion, it is obvious that the
percentage
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 of households with electrical equipment is increasing
trend
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.
In addition
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,
people
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 spending
time
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 on homework had a going up
trend
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, time, housework, trend, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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