The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart provides information about how many
men
and women join
gym subscriptions over a thirty-year period, from 1980 to 2010. Wrong verb form
joined
Overall
, the gym membership was predominantly by men
in the first ten years before being replaced by the counterpart in the middle and the last
year.
To start with, in the first year, men
stood at 2,000 individuals, which then
increased to approximately 4,000 people
before falling significantly to about 2,800 people
in 1995. In the following year, the number of men
went up dramatically and reached its peak to
just over 5,000 Change preposition
of
people
, which then
declined sharply to the lowest point at
only under 1,000 members in the Change preposition
of
last
period.
Turning to women
membership, it began with just around 1,000 Change noun form
women's
people
, which then
rose steadily to nearly 3,000 people
in 1995 before decreasing slightly to just over 2,000 people
in 2000, followed by rising back to its previous position in 2005 at around 3,000 people
. In
the end of the period given, the number of women declined to a little less than 2,000 Change the preposition
At
people
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