The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart provides information about how many
men
and women
join
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gym subscriptions over a thirty-year period, from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, the gym membership was predominantly by
men
in the first ten years before being replaced by the counterpart in the middle and the
last
year. To start with, in the first year,
men
stood at 2,000 individuals, which
then
increased to approximately 4,000
people
before falling significantly to about 2,800
people
in 1995. In the following year, the number of
men
went up dramatically and reached its peak
to
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just over 5,000
people
, which
then
declined sharply to the lowest point
at
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of
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only under 1,000 members in the
last
period. Turning to
women
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women's
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membership, it began with just around 1,000
people
, which
then
rose steadily to nearly 3,000
people
in 1995 before decreasing slightly to just over 2,000
people
in 2000, followed by rising back to its previous position in 2005 at around 3,000
people
.
In
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the end of the period given, the number of women declined to a little less than 2,000
people
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • membership trends
  • male and female comparison
  • notable increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • consistently
  • peak points
  • divergent patterns
  • parallels in trends
  • correlation
  • timeframe
  • cultural shifts
  • awareness of fitness
  • significant differences
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