The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The process details the steps by which smoked
fish
is produced. Looking from an Use synonyms
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that smoking Linking Words
fish
can be divided into 3 main stages beginning with catching and transportation, followed by storage and processing, and Use synonyms
finally
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further
storage and transportation to Linking Words
fish
shops for retail.
The process commences when Use synonyms
fish
are caught in nets and Use synonyms
then
transported by boat to a port. From Linking Words
this
point, they are frozen and Linking Words
then
later undergo a thawing process in freshwater. The next stage is to slice open the Linking Words
fish
and put them in a saltwater solution that Use synonyms
also
contains some amount of yellow colouring. Linking Words
Following
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this
, the actual smoking takes place.
After smoking, the Linking Words
fish
are packaged in boxes and frozen at zero degrees centigrade in larger containers. They are Use synonyms
finally
grouped into cold storage bins and distributed by truck to shops to sell to consumers.Linking Words
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