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Graph about the population of four Asian countries and urbanization

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The graph illustrates the percentage of the urbanized population in
Malaysia
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, the
Philippines
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,
Thailand
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, and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for the years 2030 and 2040.
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, it can be seen that
Malaysia
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 has the highest proportion of people living in cities,
while
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Thailand
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 is the least urbanized country on the list.
Malaysia
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 and Indonesia share a similar pattern of urbanization. Starting at around 30% and 15% of the population living in cities in 1970, by 2020, they had already surpassed the other countries, with approximately 70% and 50% of their respective populations living in urban areas. These numbers are expected to grow even
further
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 by 2040, reaching 80% for
Malaysia
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 and 60% for Indonesia. The patterns for the
Philippines
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 and
Thailand
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also
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 appear to be similar. From 1970 to 1990, they experienced consistent growth, with the urbanized population increasing from almost 20% to around 30% in the
Philippines
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, and from 30% to 50% in
Thailand
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.
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, the number of urban dwellers fluctuated or even declined until 2010 in both countries. After 2010, they regained momentum and witnessed an increase in urbanization rates, with a projected growth of 10% for the
Philippines
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 and 15% for
Thailand
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 in the next 30 years.

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