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In many places, large amounts of food are wasted. What might be the reasons for this problem? What can best be done to reduce food waste

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It is obvious that
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 hundreds of inhabitants suffer from famine, a significant amount of
food
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 is wasted by developed countries all over the world. From my perspective, understanding the causes of
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 pressing issue is important and several measures should be taken to encourage
people
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 to reduce their excessive consumption. It can be clearly seen that there are various compelling reasons why
people
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 have an upward trend in consuming too much
food
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 nowadays. The obvious cause is that in today’s modern society,
prices
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the prices
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 of
food
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 are extremely reasonable. The most important evidence supporting my belief is that thanks to advanced agricultural technologies,
people
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 increase both the quality and quantity of cultivated crops. Specifically, the way
food
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 is stored and distributed to the
consumers
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 is pretty easy with inexpensive prices,
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consequently
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 a remarkable number of
consumers
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 purchase that
food
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 and waste it without thinking.
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, another cause of
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 problem is that governments lack strict regulations and heavy fines for wasting
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. To be more precise, awareness about consuming too much can be incorrect with
people
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, so they might have difficulty in preventing cravings and consuming
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 without control unless they don’t be deterred by the laws.
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, some countries reduce their excessive consumption after local authorities enact laws and fine heavily for anyone who breaks the rule
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 as China.
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 thorny problem should be dealt with by some solutions to stimulate
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 to decrease their
food
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 demands. The first measure would be for restaurants to make
consumers
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 think about what dishes they order.
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 can be done by imposing heavy fines when
people
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 order too much but can not finish them. As an illustration of
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, in buffet restaurants, when
consumers
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 take a remarkable amount of
food
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 but
not
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 eat it, they will have to be fined by paying extra for the
food
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 that they order.
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, another important measure is that local authorities should launch some campaigns to raise
people
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’s awareness.
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, it is necessary to display
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the consequences
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 they have to suffer from when wasting
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, especially in the pandemic of Covid 19, it is very difficult for
people
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 to purchase fresh and nutritious
food
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. In conclusion,
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 issue is ascribed to a number of causes
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 as cheapness in
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food’s
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food
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 prices and lack of vital knowledge when consuming too much, so it is necessary for both individuals and governments to propose ways to reinforce
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 in consuming
food
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 with suitable levels

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