Some people say History in one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important that History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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I think every

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is important for us. We have to learn everything through our past, present and future. Some

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say that History is one of the most important school subjects it's true but it has to go

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today's world which is

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and

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. How can we move without our history, the

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behind us "The ancient

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" is the most powerful

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us to move forward.

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taught us how to fire

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light, How to find

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we wouldn't know that without them.

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are important too. They give us a chance to move forward with them. Without

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we're just

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humans

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being. We spend our daily life with no useful. Without them we have no light we have no food, we have no comfortable stuff and things. Old

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without these things. Humans

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lots of invention to give

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based on a limited government. May I gives one example of the development of

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give us a chance to be a member of ASEAN “Association of South East Asia Nation” we can be able to communicate with the other 9 countries with

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high

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, it

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us to be a TEAMWORK with the 9 other countries to develop our country. help us in terms of transportation, communication, collaboration etc.

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on to that hope that in the near future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

270 words

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Cultural heritage
Historical perspective
Analytical skills
Contextual understanding
Technological advancements
STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
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Interdisciplinary
Job market
Climate crisis
Cultural identity
Critical thinking
Humanities
Contemporary issues
Integration
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Some people say History in one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important that History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some students choose to take a gap year after graduating high school to work and/or travel. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people suggest that the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Creative artists should always be given freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some believe that professional success depends largely on obtaining a good education, while others contend that personal talent and drive are more significant. Discuss both views and give your opinion.