Some people say History in one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important that History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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opinion
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I think every
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is important for us. We have to learn everything through our past, present and future. Some
people
say that History is one of the most important school subjects it's true but it has to go
along with
today's world which is
science
and
Technology
. How can we move without our history, the
people
behind us "The ancient
people
" is the most powerful
people
who
pushes
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us to move forward.
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taught us how to fire
a
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light, How to find
a food
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, How to
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with
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and animals, How to survive and others. Of
course
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we wouldn't know that without them.
Science
and
Technology
are important too. They give us a chance to move forward with them. Without
Science
and
Technology
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we're just
a
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normally
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humans
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being. We spend our daily life with no useful. Without them we have no light we have no food, we have no comfortable stuff and things. Old
people
can
survived
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without these things. Humans
creates
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lots of invention to give
an unlimited wants
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of
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people
based on a limited government. May I gives one example of the development of
science
and
Technology
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two things
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give us a chance to be a member of ASEAN “Association of South East Asia Nation” we can be able to communicate with the other 9 countries with
the
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high
technology
, it
help
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us to be a TEAMWORK with the 9 other countries to develop our country. help us in terms of transportation, communication, collaboration etc.
it
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can definitely
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on to that hope that in the near future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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