The diagram illustrates the life cycle of salmon through various stages.

The diagram illustrates the life cycle of salmon through various stages.
The diagram illustrates the life cycle of
salmon
through various
stages
.
Overall
, there are 3
stages
in the process, with 2
stages
happen
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in freshwater
while
the
last
step
occurr
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occur
occurs
in saltwater. As can be seen, the first step in the process is hatching the
salmon
eggs
to be
fry
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. The
salmon
eggs
are covered by reeds and small stones in the flow-moving upper
river
. After 5 - 6 months, these
eggs
hatch and develop
fry
which is about 3 - 8cm. The
fry
spend
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approximately 4 years staying fast-flowing lower
river
before moving
another
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to another
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place.
At
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In
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the following
stages
, the
fry
grows up to become the smolt with
the
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a
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length is 12 - 15cm. They
leaves
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leave
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the
river
in order to go to the open sea and live here
approximately
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for approximately
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5 years. After that, the smolt transforms into adult
salmon
,
that
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which
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is about 70 – 76 cm. Adult
salmon
finds
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find
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a safe place in the
river
to hatch the
eggs
and
continues
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continue
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their life cycle
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