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The higher proportion of older population will over take younger generation what is the reason? is it positive or negative development?

#proportion #population #generation #reason #development
generation
 of young
people
 will not be change all of the
number
elder
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elders
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 with the most percentage. it is because the ranges youngest and elder
is
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are
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 different and depend on the numerous
people
 in the country. it is a positive side to
develop
Wrong verb form
developing
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youngest
Correct article usage
the youngest
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 can help elder
people
 and can be
generation
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a generation
the generation
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 in the future. the sum
people
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of people
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 between younger and older is different. Based on data, human marriage can
reproduct
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reproduce
 more than one child, in the past the
parents
 usually have a child more than 10 children. if we calculate the sum
up
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of
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parents
 and
child
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children
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, it means the
number
 of younger more than the
number
 of
parents
. it proof will not change if the percentage elder the most than younger.
for example
, based on culture, in the past
parents
 knew if they have many children they got
the
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apply
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grateful.
in
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On
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positive
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the positive
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 side, the younger
will
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ones will
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 be able
the
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to the
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 elder to
got
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get
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 what they do
,
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apply
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 if the children have a good personality and they do not think about the problem they have it. in
conclution
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conclusion
, the huge youngest is not
depend
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dependent
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 on the
number
elder
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of elder
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 in the same city but
the
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on the
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 positive side the youngest will be able present
generation
 from the elder
generation
.
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