Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Recently,
development
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the development
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of large multinational
companies
significantly increased in some developed countries and developing countries.
This
circumstance can influence the
development
of small traders.
For
this
reason,
this
essay will discuss why the benefits of the
development
of large multinational
companies
outweigh the drawback. The existence of multinational corporations can provide many job vacancies
,
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because operating large
companies
needs
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more human resources to do it.
Hence
, the trend of multinational
companies
in a country will significantly decrease unemployment.
For instance
,
currently
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the government of Indonesia is seeking investment from large
companies
in the world to invest in Indonesia, in order to decrease
unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate which causes
an
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impact of
pandemic
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a pandemic
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.
On the other hand
, the significance of the
development
of multinational
companies
will influence the increased income of a country that receives tax
payment
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payments
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from multinational
companies
.
For example
, the largest income of Indonesian countries is 80% from tax multinational
companies
.
However
,
this
circumstance will impact small
businesses
. Many people want to work in large
companies
to earn a large salary.
Therefore
, many small
businesses
will have difficulty in finding employees. Why the large
companies
are
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becoming the trend of employees to work there,
due to
the large
companies
giving the employees some facilities
such
as insurance, incentive, birth allowance etc.
Whereas
,
the
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small
businesses
operated by a traditional system
that
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apply
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are not as professional as systems like large
companies
.
For example
, many small
businesses
in Indonesia like traditional markets will collapse. In conclusion, the benefit of
development
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the development
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of multinational
companies
is
the
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a
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decrease
of
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unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate and
increase
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an increase
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of
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government income.
However
,
this
circumstance will cause the bankruptcy of small
businesses
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Displacement
  • Economies of scale
  • Local economies
  • Standardization
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Personalized service
  • Innovation
  • Community investments
  • Environmental impact
  • Competitive prices
  • Tax contributions
  • Job losses
  • Cultural diversity
  • Local employment opportunities
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