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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Accepting a bad situation like an unsatisfactory job or money shortage, the way many people believe is the best for them.
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, others believe that trying to improve those situations is the best solution. In my opinion, I believe that we should try to improve our lives as it's our purpose in
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. In
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, you may meet people who prefer to accept the situation.
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, how it is difficult, unfair, or even changeable.
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, they consider it as a type of contentment, by trying to avoid any conflict or confrontation with others.
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, during my career I met a very hardworking woman, who was so dedicated to her job, even she used to work during the weekends to cover the shortage in the team. But she never tried to ask for a raise or promotion or even recognition. So when the management tended to promote someone, they promoted another person, Who was more keen to show up how he deserves
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 promotion. Surprisingly, she didn’t argue or even talk to them that she deserved
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 promotion.
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,I believe that you should try to get the chance. The
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 will not come to those who accept the less
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 but will come for those who are trying and doing their best, because trying to improve a position is a must in
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, you should fight and argue - not literally of course- to get what you deserve and what you want.
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, when I got promoted, I got a very small raise and I believe that I deserve a higher raise in my salary, so I went to the human resources department and emphasised my point of view and yes, I got a higher raise.
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 is unfair, so you should fight and try to improve your situation continuously. Not only Confronting your fears and speaking up is a must to get what you deserve, but
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 working hard and doing your best to deserve what you want is a must.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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