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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative solution?

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Nowadays,
home
 is an important key for making humans happy. We all spend about half of our
life
 in our
home
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homes
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. Having a special place for living and taking rest is
cruitial
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crucial
critical
 for people
instead
 of renting a flat or paying
money
 for it. Because renting is costing us and it becomes an issue in dailies
life
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons why having
aplace
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a place
 to
there
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be there
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 has a positive point which I agree
.
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with.
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 On the one hand, renting
flat
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a flat
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 or any place to stay and live there costs you and increases the
dificulties
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difficulties
for
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in
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 your
life
.
For example
, if you take a
home
 as a
rent
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rental
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 to live there, you have to pay monthly and you
loss
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lose
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money
 which makes you unhappy.
In addition
, you have to work more to gain
money
 to pay for the
owner
 of the house.
However
, if you have a small
home
, you do not need to pay
money
 for
renting
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rent
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,
instead
 you can spend
this
amont
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amount
 of
money
in
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on
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 other things
such
 as
buy
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buying
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 something which you need
it
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apply
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and you can enjoy more.
On the other hand
,
restructure
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restructuring
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 of renting
home
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a home
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 is
lossing
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losing
money
 or not allowed.
For instance
, if you want to add or change some parts of the flat that you are not happier with it, the
owner
 is not letting you
to
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apply
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do it, still if you pay the cost, it needs
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the owner
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owner
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owner's
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 permission.
Finally
, living in a
renting
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rented
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 flat makes us less
happier
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happy
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, costs us, and needs more
working
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work
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 for collecting
money
 and pay
to
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apply
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the
owner
 of
a
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the
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home
. I can conclude that having a
home
 or a place to live there makes your
life
 more valuable,
happier
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and happier
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, and returns
money
 to you.
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