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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
#development #village #ryemouth
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The provided maps illustrate
the
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Ryemouth
village
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 before and after
the
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 development from 1995 to the present. Over the period, the
village
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 was completely transformed, many buildings were demolished,
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then
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 replaced by other facilities. The most noticeable change is the sports facilities on the northeast of the
village
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, where the farmland and forest park were removed and the golf and tennis courts were developed. The hotel and cafe
were remained
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,
however
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, the hotel’s car park was constructed. It can be seen from the map that the fishing industry near the sea
on
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 the southwest of the
village
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 including
fishing
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 port, fish market, and shops were totally removed and converted
to
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 restaurants and accommodations. Meanwhile,
at
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 the
northwest
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 the number of houses
were
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increased
along with
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 the new roads.
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, over the twenty-eight-year period, the Ryemouth
village
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were
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 changed from an
industry
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village
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 to an urban
village
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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