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Band 5.5

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.

Nowadays,
home
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 is an important key for making humans happy. We all spend about half of our
life
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 in our homes. Having a special
place
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 for living and taking rest is crucial for people
instead
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 of renting a flat or paying
money
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 for it. Because renting is costing us and it becomes an issue in dailies
life
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons why having a
place
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 to be there has a positive point which I agree
.
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with.
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 On the one hand, renting a flat or any
place
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 to stay and live there costs you and increases the difficulties in your
life
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.
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, if you take a
home
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 as a rental to live there, you have to pay monthly and you lose
money
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 which makes you unhappy.
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, you have to work more to gain
money
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 to pay for the
owner
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 of the house.
However
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, if you have a small
home
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, you do not need to pay
money
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 for rent,
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instead
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 you can spend
this
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 amount of
money
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 on other things
such
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 as buying something which you need and you can enjoy more.
On the other hand
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, restructuring
of
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or
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 renting a
home
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 is losing
money
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 or not allowed.
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, if you want to add or change some parts of the flat that you are not happier with it, the
owner
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 is not letting you do it,
still
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and still
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 if you pay the cost, it needs
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owner's
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the owner's
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 permission.
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, living in a rented flat makes us less happy, costs us, and needs more work for collecting
money
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 and pay the
owner
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 of the
home
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. I can conclude that having a
home
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 or a
place
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 to live there makes your
life
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 more valuable, and happier, and returns
money
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 to you.

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